Fire!
Posted June 15, 2009
on:- In: 55er | Fiction | Love
- 56 Comments
There was fire in his eyes…
Fire of love, fire of jealousy, fire of betrayal…
Betrayal?
Why?
She was his friend, nothing else, or so he said, time and again!
“Congratulations!” he said, with fire in his eyes and bouquet in his hands!
P.S. Tried 55er for the first time. Haven’t used all 55 words though. Hope I haven’t disappointed you guys 🙂
56 Responses to "Fire!"
Nice attempt, only somewhere its hurt and no end to it.
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Kahin aapne chot to nahi khayi hai kabhi!
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Haale dil sunane se darte hai sabhi,
Apne dil ki agg se dusro ko jalane se darte hai sabhi,
Sabh khud he khaakh ho jayege agar,
agar har ek kahani ka anth hoga yehi…
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Well i have written something, of my own please take and look and give your comment.
http://blog.sushantchaudhary.com/2009/06/18/you-are-my-imagination/
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nice attempt…
found this really interesting…trying to pen in a short story in 55 words…will try put a few myself…
your long stories are really nice and intereting too :):)
seem to touch different emotions in each one…
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Thanks and i too feel more comfortable writing the long ones… 55 words, i feel, is too less for me! 🙂
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Wow !!! a very nice 55-er …. I have been reading 55-ers in blogs around off late and this one’s really good …
and I must say one needs some mastery over fiction writing to write a 55-er well like you did in your first attempt…
the ‘punch’ version was also funny 😀
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1 | Anu
June 15, 2009 at 1:32 pm
Hmm.. nice try..! 🙂
Not as good as all ur stories, but a nice 55er !! 😉
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sakhi
June 15, 2009 at 6:04 pm
hmmm… have to think about this! 🙂
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