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Aagam and Vaidehi

Posted on: July 6, 2009

fiction_stamp2“There she is!” A big smile spread over Aagam’s face when he spotted Vaidehi.

Vaidehi was a new student in his class who had joined recently. She was a very quiet girl and had a sweet smile for every one. Initially he found her weird as she was very different from the rest of them. She never wore jeans or skirts or tees unlike his other friends. She never came with them for an outing or never hung out with them after the college was over. But she was with them through out the day and was an easy person to get along with. She never cribbed or never gossiped. He tried to ask her out a couple of times but she politely refused. His charm was lost on her!

Presently he saw her and was feeling happy as it was his birthday and he wanted to invite her to the party he was throwing in the evening. All his friends were going to come.

“Hey, Vaidehi, ruk yaar!”

Arey, aaj to Aagam saheb subah subah college aa gaye!! Kya baat hai janaab?” She teased him good naturedly.

Theek hai, theek hai, jyaada has ne ki zaroorat nahi hai! Haan to mein kya kehne aya tha? Dekh tere chakkar me, mein bhool hi gaya! Arey haan, sun aaj shaam ko party hai aur tujhe aana hai… koi bahaana nahi chahiye, samajhi!”

“Party?”

“It’s my birthday today, so wish me, sweetie!”

“Cut the crap, Aaagam. Tujhe kitni baar bataya hai ki mujhse aise baat na kiya kar! Anyway, many happy returns of the day. But I won’t be able to come to the party. Sorry yaar!” She saw his face darkening with disappointment.

“But hey, we will have a blast here in the canteen.” She didn’t want him to feel so bad, especially today, as it was his birthday.

Yaar teri problem kya hai? Sab hi to aa rahe hai. It’s not as if I am calling you alone and taking you to some god-forsaken place, dammit!” He was really upset and felt the kind of disappointment he couldn’t explain even to himself.

He strode off, livid with anger. Vaidehi stood there looking at his back. She wanted to call him, to tell him the reasons but she knew she belonged to a different world and he can never be a part of it. She was grateful for even been allowed to get back to acaedemics. She sighed and went to the class. The whole day Aagam’s disappointed face floated in front of her eyes. Her heart went out for him. She went home early; she wasn’t able to concentrate, anyway!

Aagam didn’t talk to her for a couple of days. Didn’t even tell her how the party went when she asked. She knew that Aagam was not his usual self since their last conversation. She couldn’t afford to care about it. But care, she did!

Days  passed and everything between Vaidehi and Aagam settled back to normal. As normal as it can be between two adults who are attracted towards each other and are not allowed to acknowledge it. Aagam tried twice after his birthday to say something more to Vaidehi but her face told him not to venture in the territory which might be laden with explosives. After that he never tried.

He  didn’t understand Vaidehi’s attitude though. She didn’t want more and yet he saw her anxious face when he was being playful with other girls of their group. She would get upset if he didn’t meet her at least once a day or was absent from college without telling her beforehand. She was a puzzle to him. But he had resigned to the fate and had accepted to be her friend or whatever they were.

It was third day today that Vaidehi hadn’t turned up for the classes. It was unlike her. Aagam was getting agitated but he didn’t have a choice but to wait for her to come. None of their friends had her mobile number or landline number. She never gave it to them. When she did not come for another two days, Aagam asked Kusum to ask about Vaidehi’s address at the administrative office.

When Kusum and Aagam reached at the given address they were in for a shock. Not only it was one of the posh areas but the bungalow was sprawled over at least 20,000 sq. feet area. They looked at each other and wondered whether they should go inside. They decided to check about the whole issue since now their curiosity was heightened. When the guards were satisfied about them, they were taken into the house.

They were taken to Vaidehi’s quarter and a bomb fell upon Aagam when he saw her. She was wearing complete white as if she was a widow. One of the females there called Vaidehi and she looked at them with a blank face as if she did not recognize them. But as her eyes fell on Aagam, she started crying, softly at first. Aagam and Kusum were dumb struck at the flurry of activity going on around them. One of the ladies told them that Vaidehi lost her husband a few days back. He committed suicide!

Husband?

Suicide?

Nausea rose up in Aagam’s throat; he turned around and almost ran out of the house.

A few days later, somebody showed him an old newspaper clipping: “Impotence being the reason behind the suicide of the leading entrepreneur’s only son…”

109 Responses to "Aagam and Vaidehi"

Oh my God what a story!
So was she compelled to get married to him? Is that why she kept a distance from everyone else? Or was it because she was married and was still pursuing her studies and was embarrassed? I have so many questions all of a sudden!!
Feel so bad for her now…
But hey, maybe she and Aagam can now get together and start their own family..!🙂
Nice story as always, you rock!😉

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Kitne questions poochhti hai be!!😛 😛

And i don’t think that every story has an happy ending🙂

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Your readers are hungry for more of your artistry!

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Vaidehi was second wife of the impotent. He killed his first wife thinking that she was infertile. Then later on he realized that he is the one shooting blanks, couldn’t get over the guilt, So he committed suicide.

There’s another extended version too, let me know if someone is interested in it.

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Looks like there was some confusion, impotency is not same as sterility. Here’s from impotency pt. of view:

So the barrel of his gun was pointing south. He ended up shooting his foot & died of pain and poisoning, ashamed of his son father reported it as a suicide. Vaidehi is crying because she is scared that…..

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is this the extended version?

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Tu aise ajeeb si cheezein kaise soch leta hai!!🙄

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hahahaahahaaaa!!😀

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oh my gawd…
but is impotence really that big a dilemma in someone’s mind to committ suicide.. isn’t it too harsh ending.. it could ‘ve been little less painful

but yea.. its a story afterall.. a nice one..!!

Keep Writing

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Impotence and sterility are two different things and impotence CAN weigh a lot on man!!

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very nice story..

one question .. had she lost her husband and then continued studies or she was not at college for 3 days as her husband had died…

whichever way it was.. way very nice one.. i really loved it..

no further happy ending for this please (this is for Anshul) .. it feels complete here… somehow..

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Thanks and i, too, felt that this story felt complete too!🙂

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Aaaah Nice one !!

It became somewhat predictable in the middle but a very nice narattion of the whole story – about vaidehi’s introvertness, about aagam’s feelings ..

Great work !!

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Thanks, but that means i am losing my touch🙂 🙂

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No way Sakhi .. U r not at all losing your touch and perfection .. I did not mean that ..

But somehow I got the intution that she might be married and that’s why she is not going out with Aagam .. But in my wildest dreams. I hv never thought about the suicide thing ..

So i did not mean to dishearten you .. You are good at narrating stories and you keep all of us at the edge in every story you write ..

You simply rock and so as ur stories !!

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Awwwww… that was so sweet of you to come back and perk me up 🙂 🙂 Thanks!🙂

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Sakhi!!! What a story this is!!!!

I was hooked to it!!! So so well written my dear!!!!

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Thanks smita!🙂 I am glad YOU liked it!🙂

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A very well written story ended on a dreadful note😦 had her husband not committed suicide but she was absent for some good reason… the impact would be same as readers would be shocked knowing abt her marriage but might be a happy ending…

neways, a very well written piece of fiction🙂

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I like this ending.

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@ Akash

Life is not all about happy endings! Sadly!!

@ Swaps

I like this ending too!🙂

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OMG, this one was the best among all I read on your blog.

Keep it up :0)

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Wow, now that’s what i call a complement!!🙂

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Nice story… also unpredictable climax…🙂

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ok this is a different anshul else i would have taken “unpredictable climax” to be a very witty quip.😀

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Thanks Anshul…🙂

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There you go! You are back with your unique names🙂 Share that dictionary of yours please

Now that Vaidehi’s impotent hubby’s gone, Aagam can try his luck😀

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I don’t think life is as easy as, one gone, one in queue!!🙂

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I saw a picture saying ‘fiction’ at the start of the post and anything can happen in fiction🙂

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More than this goes on in real life… as its said “truth is stranger than the fiction”🙂

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Ummm ending kuch hazam nahi hua.

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kyon??? you too wanted an happy ending??

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no its not about happy ending. the reason for suicide and it as the ending sentence of the story and its context with the story…all indigestible.

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Hajmola khao, sub kuchh pachao!😉

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and whats with “Aagam”..why the double a?

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Because its Aagam and not Agam!!

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What happened to you?? Very disappointing …

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What did you not like, narration or the story line???😦 Your feedback means a lot to me and you know it!

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Nice story…but how come she never told anyone in college that shes married ???I mean, if Aagam was so very much in love with her, he would have got to know about her background as well, rt?? Im confused now !

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Probably She was ashamed or was guarding honour of the family or something on that line, since she was married to a big shot family and her husband was an impotent, she might have thought not to divulge too much or was instructed to do so!!

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what a gripping story Sakhi!!
amazing!one of your best I think..

loved it!

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Thanks sweetie!🙂

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Love it! You are a master story-weaver. I love the enigma of the public-face, private-life dilemma. How sad for the entrepreneur’s son – to have such details reported in the papers after his death!!🙂

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your posts are nice i added your link in my blog your link back shall be welcomed you are welcomed to my blog and i expect your valuable comments

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Sure, i will be over… and i am adding you to my reader🙂

Thanks again!🙂

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You simply rock, sakhi !!!!!!!!!!!!

Unpredictable, as usual!!!

This is story, but if someone wants to take as real life scenario, life for Vaidehi, begins at this junction…………

Why should we consider end at this point?? this is one very important but part of life, not complete one.

–amit

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Thanks amit🙂 I sincerely hope that this IS a begining of a new life for vaidehi!🙂

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wow… didn’t see that coming. I thought she was a victim of prejudice against girl child !
very nice.
i also used the newspaper climax in one of my stories.

part I : http://darogaspeaks.blogspot.com/2007/08/kaun-i.html
part II: http://darogaspeaks.blogspot.com/2007/08/kaun-ii.html

don’t know if you have read them already🙂

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😦 I hadn’t read those… now i have read them and feel sad!!😦 Kisi ka bhi vishwaas nahi kar sakte na!!😦

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didn’t expect the husband to be rich😛

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Nice story Sakhi! I enjoyed this one a lot. It was kind of gripping and one wanted to know the end. I think this in a way shows that we should not judge people because they don’t behave in the way we do.

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Yeah, appearances can be deceptive!🙂

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Good one. Enjoyed it!

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Whoa! Whoa!!😀
Did Vaidehi read this one?? Does she know you’ve immortalized her in this story! She’ll kill you!!😀😀😀

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I asked her and she told me, she would have killed YOU if you had done this, but not me!!😛 😛

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The story was indeed gripping, and the ending was good too – quite unpredictable. But Vaidehi should have been more open about herself in the college.

Destination Infinity

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You are right

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😀 😀 And i thought you said “i was right”😛 😛

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A gripping one … her marriage n all – nt a single hint!

First time .. will visit again🙂

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@ swaram

welcome and see you around!🙂

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Amazing … You surely are in firm grip of the words, your pen (keyboard) and your thoughts to let your readers feel connected to each and every paragraph that you pen down … I truly believe that every one can surely write, but only some of them can write in a manner that a sense of continuity prevails🙂
Good job … Keep it up !!!

As for the story, I have always believed that everyone in this world does not get everything from up above. Life is all about compromises but more importantly life is all about having the strength to move on with such compromises and not give up like Vaidehi’s husband did.

A nice story …

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short of words, i liked the way you ended it.

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Good one, as always! 🙂

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Dear Sakhi,

I hope you won’t mind my using this forum to ask if you might be able to help confirm the well-being of a fellow friend, Rolling (http://nabinatrisha.wordpress.com/2009/06/26/sabarmati-sunset/). I know her through her beautiful writings at Open Salon, and several of us over at OS are concerned because we haven’t heard from her since her last message in this post:

http://open.salon.com/blog/newfort/2009/07/11/the_tension_of_opposites

It sounds like she is in a very vulnerable situation in India. Uncertain of her real name (Nabina Nag?) or an alternative way of contacting her, we’re feeling a bit powerless to follow up and ensure her safety. I googled her name and found her WordPress blog, which led me to you, since you appear to also be a friend of hers in real life. I’m hoping perhaps you may be able to call and confirm her safety, and let her know her friends at Open Salon would like to help if there’s anything we can do.

Thank you, and again, I apologize for interrupting the conversation about your good writing to discuss an unrelated topic, but this seemed important enough to warrant it.

—Melissa

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Melissa, i talked to her and she seems to be fine though have some things on mind. I told her about yu being concern about her. She might respond to you directly🙂

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Dear Sakhi,

I cannot tell you what a blessing it is to hear from you! The whole OS community has been concerned for Rolling’s well-being, as you can see from this post by our friend Newton:

http://open.salon.com/blog/newfort/2009/07/15/urgent_can_you_assist_in_contacting_rolling

Thank you again for serving as a crucial link between Rolling and those of us who have come to appreciate her talent and care for her so deeply at Open Salon.

With gratitude,

Melissa

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Sakhi, thanks for following up, and am relieved she’s OK.

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@Newton and Melissa

I am sure she didnt know that you guys were so concerned… will put in these sentiments to her again and am sure she will respond at the earliest! God bless!🙂

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but but…i want a happy happy ending!😐

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…Then write one! Just like a “Make your own adventure” book! Carpe Diem!😀

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@ Manushee

Sometimes the sad ending can’t be avoided.🙂

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great story Sakhi..

It’s thrilling and had an element of suspense from the start.. loved it🙂

but why you are having more and more sad ends these days??😦

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Thanks kanagu🙂

Dunno, i might feel like writing a sad one. Usually I don’t give a thought to the endings… they come naturally!🙂

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i also want to have a pet so cuteee

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Sorry Radha, I don’t remember where I got this one from.😦 Am extremely sorry!

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For a wide range of cute, customisable sidebar pets, try this site:

http://bunnyherolabs.com/adopt/

But please make sure to select “non-flash” since WordPress.com does not allow flash sidebar widgets.

For Sakhi’s cute hamster, click on the word “aBowman” on the top right corner of the widget to get the code.

Hope this is useful.

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ahh… ur selection of names for ur characters.. where do u get all these anmes? sad story…

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Why did she think she was from another world? Just because she was married?

There’s not much that could catch my attention…

Wish the language was more polished, even correct…

http://asachkahitari.wordpress.com/

http://writecouldbewrong.wordpress.com/

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I am reminded of the idiom: “Can’t see the wood for the trees.” But then I am not a very polished writer either. Sigh.

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@ Sioneve

you are an awesome writer and you know that🙂 Thanks buddy!🙂

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@ Inky

Good that you visited and commented. There are so many writers and so many stories and so many blogs coz people like to read different things. Prolly you didn’t like it here. Hope you get your kinda stuff somewhere else.

Thanks for the visit anyway!🙂

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baap re kya climax hai !!!😦

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Baap re, I was so engrossed to know the ending – what an ending yaar😀

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Sad😦 But such a gripping story…well written!🙂

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Thanks Raj and welcome back!🙂

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Oh! that was a gripping and touching story. Sad ending but seems apt here.

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Thanks a bunch solilo!🙂

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Where are you??? Come back, come back! Miss you and your stories!

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A tad busy with real life! Will be back ASAP!🙂 Thanks for remembering me!🙂

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Are we still munching on same one! – Yes.

Waiting for new !

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Sorry sunny, to disappoint you! Will be back ASAP🙂

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Just came across your blog through others’.. nice story..cudnt guess the ending …will visit again🙂

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Welcome Avada🙂 Am glad you liked it!🙂

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Lovelt blog I really enjoyed reading all the short stories🙂

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Thanks magic!🙂

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Lovely blog I really enjoyed reading all the short stories🙂

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This is d frst time I visitd ur blog nd frst time um cmmnting nd i hate 2 write a negative one.. So plz pardon me.
The end sumhow has no relation 2 the whole story. Whole thru d story i thot she mst b a widow, bt if she was married, what is d reason 2 hide it. I mean thr r so many girls who r married nd continue their studies.
Somehow u justify her attraction to Aagam by declaring in d end tht her husband was impotent. But still the way the story was built, end did not justify it. It was too abrupt.
Evn if u hd ended it by declaring she was a widow, it would have been plausible though predictable.
Again sorry 4 this negative review. I’ll be cuming back 2 read other stories too as ur fictions seem quite popular among the bloggers.

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Don’t worry about the negative comments as long as they are in good taste. One can not like them all…

Glad you visited and do keep coming!🙂

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Hi Vaidehi

I like the flow of narrative, the trait i struggled a bit for writing my first fiction…ending was abrupt though but its creative and entire ur choice as to what you want to begin n end with.

One more thing some problem reg ur blog comments, it is half visble…

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